Level 133 - "Aeternum" / Discussion

Solid post, honestly a pretty refreshing read. The footer navigator doesn’t work, but aside from thatvery nice work. +1

Underrated

nice concept, nice execution

I like what you got here, but… How was this written?

A bit too edgy for even my taste but I dont dislike the article for that all that much, Novote.

this article switches between first, second and third-person in ways that feel jarring at times, and not in the manner i feel like you intended.

The walls, despite lacking eyes, can see wanderers' every move. With every passing second, our confines inch closer, filling in the empty space. […] Wanderers, completely isolated, are left to their own devices.

Don't [you] anticipate having a sense of navigation, though; it's likely that wanderers will lose all of it in due time.

i don't see the purpose of switching around perspectives this often when there aren't any points of contrast or split between the different povs.

[…] they are the entrances to a realm filled with nothing but a chaotic, unknown void of forgetfulness.

expressions like these are too abstract for me to imagine anything terrifying; they sound almost cookie-cutter. the excessive use of [adjective noun of optional adjective] throughout the article can quickly get repetitive on the eyes, and funnily enough, the portion about the mouse-hawk simile was the only line i liked about the page because it felt fresh.

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