The wording in the narrative parts of this page gets a bit janky. It lacks a natural flow and the character is so bland that the narrative serves little purpose. You don't have to go hard into characterisation for such a throwaway character. Problem is, there's a complete absence of it and basically all the information is repeated in more depth in the formal section. Just one of these being present would be excusable but both just makes the narrative meaningless.
The object itself is quite basic. I don't have any issues with objects that have wholly positive effects but this page is just lacking a lot. You can do simple and sweet but this page has too many bold points to make it work as a simple and sweet page. This can relieve symptoms of depression yet this only gets 1 sentence. We know the exact measurements of this object but not that much on the experiences of people who use the object beyond a pretty basic description.
This page has the components of a decent page but it needed more development.
I forgot to say originally so editing to add it in. The mini twist that you're the one reading this message and you're the character all along doesn't really do anything. Why is my mum dead? It's a strange choice that just takes me out of it. It's better to commit to making a character that the audience feels for rather than being like 'it's actually you' when it's something so personal like this.
