Now for the things I suggest working on: the first mention of M.E.G. isn't linked, you forgot to put the final abbreviation in "A.R.O," and the dialogue feels stilted and unnatural in places.
The bad stuff doesn't take away from the enjoyment of the article, and all around is really minor.
Great article, I'm glad I got to crit it, +1
]]>Enjoyed this as I am coincidentally adding Blanche and Level 906 to my "Fun War - Turning Point" tale. Object 39 has so many possibilities for authors! Thank you.
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