Other things (unrelated to the concept):
I would also like to add that the concept, while not inherently boring, is actually quite confusing? Don't get me wrong, heh; I like the idea of the story occurring behind the main setting, but it does not feel particularly connected to the page as a whole. It's just, like, there, and does not play a crucial role. It almost seems to be the last attempt at making this page feel complete without actually having a clear direction. It is written in a way that, if it wasn't for the fact that narrative replaces certain paragraphs altogether, it could just be thrown away. Now, I am absolutely not advocating that it be removed completely or reduced by a significant margin, but it certainly feels inherently detached from the main part of the article for the most part, and that is exactly what I believe should be fixed.
]]>I will start by saying that here it wasn't the case, so it's good. The Misinformation and abnormalities, while they could also work on other pages, were quite interesting and refreshing paragraphs that replicated this feeling of weirdness (random unusable phone booths) or of the unknown (Night mirages). It was fun to read! I liked how subtlely eerie it was. That's definitely something I liked in some older 2020 pages and that I also equally like when they are pulled off well here.
However, the less good thing is the narration. I just don't get what it brings here. It's basically a standalone story. It's not using the elements of its own page (like the parts I mentionned earlier), and it just cuts the descriptive parts while not adding anything to them. They really just feel like a random level 10 journal that has no business being here and would rather work as a tale (and a longer one so that I can feel attached to the characters as well). It's a shame because your descriptive parts would have been fun to see expanded in narration (like the fog thing, which feels quite random since there is a narration not showcasing it, which make the info sounds like it's not important or was just added to lengthen the page), like seeing the more personal effects of the beliefs or anomalies of the level, who is the first to appear both outdoors and safe.
Other less important weird choices are the sometimes more personal tone of descriptive tones, such as with the overgrown road, or sentences such as "Almost every single investigator I've talked to", that clash with an otherwise quite academic tone. I would also have liked to read more about the fields in themselves, as they are a core part of the level, yet you never seem to truly focus on them.
So it is a novote for me, because there are things I like and things that are out of place. But gotta say it was definitely an interesting desolation view of the level at least.
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