(NEED READING!!!) Level 130 - The Sleeping Paradise

Hello!! This is my first level ever written, so i'm still learning to use the site and to write levels, so i'd like you guys opinion on it!! :)
Also, since English isn't my first language, it might have spelling errors, so i'd like to get corrections on that too!!

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